User:Bilsonian/Prohear, Cambodia/KiraXMaddox Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I'm reviewing Bilsonian's group on the Prohear, Cambodia site.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bilsonian/Prohear%2C_Cambodia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi everyone,

I see that there's still lots of editing to be done before your page is near complete, but I think you're off to a great start. Might I suggest adding some context to your introduction paragraph such as elaborating on what kind of environmental condition (if this information is available) are impeding on skeletal preservations. You might also add some dates for context on when this site was active, discovered, etc.

You mention gold artifacts, which I think would make a very interesting subsection where you could elaborate on what types of artifacts, where they were from, and what their purpose was. Was it status? Religious? A common trade good?

Including some images of said artifacts could also make your page stand out more and provide some very interesting context to what you decide to write about.

I think you make good use of what citations you do have and use them appropriately to back up your statements. I also like your use of hyperlinks and you may consider using one for "Cambodia" too. Your overall tone is looking great with good grammar and a unbiased approach to your topic. Keep up the good work and I look forward to seeing the progress you make.

Thank you for sharing!

Kind regards,

Kira