User:Bilsonian/Prohear, Cambodia/Pierson.evan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bilsonian, Fe.were


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bilsonian/Prohear%2C_Cambodia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great start to the site at Prohear detailing a basic synopsis that includes the location, dates, etc. that will make it clear to the reader what is going on with the site at Prohear. The only thing I would do here is to combine the beginning section with the history section as they can be both very similar as they detail the general idea of the area. The discovery section looks very laid out with a part in the aspect of looting at the site which is pretty significant. Just try to make sure in the discovery section to add more info about these rescue excavations (if possible) in order to balance the discovery of looting versus other encounters like the rescue excavations. You can probably leave out the Archaeology title as burials, environmental conditions, and artifacts speak for themselves as own sections for this piece of text. I like how you have a section on environmental conditions since the environment is very vital to a archaeological site since it can impact/deteriorate the site which can lead to consequences to discovery of more artifacts. Make sure in the artifacts section that you reconnect the artifacts/materials to the other sections like the burials, etc. since it will balance out the whole article into a well-rounded text.