User:Birdie2324/Split-brain/TheOneCheese Peer Review

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Birdie2324
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

I have no idea which of these paragraphs is your "Lead" section, so you guys gotta work on that, because I also have no idea what your article is supposed to be about.

Content:

The "Lifestyle" section has a lot of really good content, but it doesn't specify who Sperry and Gazzangia are, so I would work that into it. It also might be good to rename it, because I don't know if "Lifestyle" is a good name for it. I'm not sure if the "Memory" section really belongs in this article since it's about a surgery procedure, so you guys might wanna change that section.

Tone and Balance:

The tone of the article is really good. I think you guys nailed that aspect.

Sources and references:

So far you guys only have 3 sources, so I would gather more.

Organization:

The article is organized pretty well, but I would fix the bolded part of the article at the very top, so that it looks nicer.

Images and Media:

You guys have a good amount of images already, so just keep doing what you're doing in that regard.

Overall Impressions:

Overall your article has a lot of good elements, but it's kind of all over the place. I would make it more concise and add a lead section, so it's easier for readers to understand what what they are reading. It's not too bad, but could use some work.

~ Jacob