User:Birmaniahern/Delta-8-Tetrahydrocannabinol/Denisej 2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Birmaniahern


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Birmaniahern/Delta-8-Tetrahydrocannabinol?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Delta-8-Tetrahydrocannabinol

Evaluate the drafted changes
For your lead, I think the way you expanded the information is beneficial for readers because of the emphasis on the other names for delta-8-Tetrahydrocannabinol and the disclaimer that it has not been approved by the FDA along with who it should not be used around. This helps set the tone for the article because of the sections of legality and effects. You edits also contribute to the clarity and conciseness of the article. I see that you are planning to remove information that is not pertinent to the general topic which could also benefit the reader by decreasing potential confusion or complexities.

Regarding tone, try being mindful about using words like "most" as it could be considered as word that is not neutral. The sentence "While most states have legalized ∆8-THC, a handful have not leading to confusion" is relevant to the article and could be slightly rewritten to seem more neutral just to avoid claims of bias by using " a number of states" possibly.

Your sources are also relevant to your topic and I think it is good you used the FDA as a source because it a fact-based and neutral source. Overall, your edits are concise and clear which will help readers understand this topic. I also noticed that you added more balance in the article by representing another aspect of ∆8-THC. The only thing I suggest is making sure neutral words.