User:Biubiu44/Immediate early genes/Bmaghen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Biubiu44


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Biubiu44/Immediate_early_genes?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Immediate early gene

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the lead section, there are two sentences back to back that start with “Thus…”. The following sentence says “the term…” not sure what term this is referring to.

None of the intro is cited which may be an issue… I am aware that this wasn’t you so I’m not sure what you should do.

The lead section doesn’t really summarize or introduce the rest of the article. It is tough to see the relevance of IEGs as the lead is currently constructed

Overview:

I think irregardless isn’t really a used term. Regardless might be better.

Overall the overview has a lot of details, but not much context. It is hard to see the purpose of this section and how it fits into the rest of the article.

Functions:

Good job introducing the functions with the first couple sentences.

Utilized not “utalized”.

The style you are writing with is a little bit too much of summaries of the source information… I think with a wikipedia article you can be more to the point with what you’re writing.

Adversely affect not “adversity effect”

For the schizophrenia section, I think that it may benefit from moving the first two sentences to the back. But that’s just my preference…