User:Bjbo1734/Patco Strike of 1981/Bbgmj Peer Review

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Bjbo1734
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Lead includes bits of information from throughout the article, needs to get checked for grammar and use different nouns and action verbs throughout sentences.

Content

I feel the content is a little off and adds confusion, there should be more depth and separation between naming the different organizations such as PATCO and FAA and what they are individually.

Tone and Balance

The content was neutral and the writers did a good job of representing all aspects well.

Organization

To help with organization try adding more sub headings in the article in order to be more clear in the article.

Sources and References

Sources used were all secondary sources with good information and will add notability to the article.

Overall Impressions

Overall I feel the content and knowledge on the subject is there, I believe they just need to go back and reword and make edits to their article for grammatical changes. Using less of the same word and finding new words to replace reused words.