User:Bjbo1734/Patco Strike of 1981/Kac1418 Peer Review

General info
Patco Strike of 1981
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bjbo1734


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Bjbo1734/Patco Strike of 1981
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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Does the lead include and introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describe the article's topic?

- The topic sentence for your article does an adequate job of introducing the PATCO strike but I'm wondering if there is more information that could be added to create a more clear understanding.

Content
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

- I feel like I'm missing content on each of the different organizations or that, in general, it is a bit confusing to read because it is all bunched together.

Tone and Balance
Is the content added neutral?

- The content itself is very factual and strays from creating bias in its entirety.

Sources and References
Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

- All of the information is factual, but it lacks citations proving they are backed by a reliable source. I would go in and add citations throughout your writing.

Organization
Is the content added well written?

- I would read through all of your information again. The word "strike" is used multiple times in multiple sentences which hurts the flow of your sentences. Additionally, different grammar would be good to use because it sometimes feels like we are reading the same variations of sentences.

Overall Impressions
What are the strengths of the content added?

- You have an immense amount of information that describes the topic in a way that makes you learn something about the PATCO strike. Your use of different organizations shows how the strike affected multiple different aspects of the aviation business and why it was important to the labor movement as a whole. Including information about Labor Unions before PATCO was also beneficial to your article and creating understanding of the history of the strike.