User:Bjfurrer/sandbox

Alien Space Bats

 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic?
 * Yes, I would add some media if there is any available. Not necessarily of the bats, but of the group that first coined the term.
 * Are some areas under- or over-developed?
 * I think the overview could use some work. It is a single sentence and it is too advanced for an overview.
 * Written neutrally?
 * Isn't saying something is sarcastic an opinion? Also, the article mentions "poorly written alternative histories due to lack of plausibility." Isn't this also an opinion?
 * Does each claim have a citation? Are the citations reliable?
 * Link number 3 is malicious and the group no longer has content in it.
 * "poorly written alternative histories due to lack of plausibility" should really have a citation or it seems like an opinion.

Separatist Feminism

 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic?
 * Yes.
 * Are some areas under- or over-developed?
 * I think the section on Lesbian separatism needs to be split up more, it is too big. I want to create a section on how lesbian separatism came to be.
 * I want to add a small blurb about Olivia Records in music section.
 * I want to update the section on the Furies to include the rules.
 * I may add more about heterosexual separatism, because the section is very short.
 * Is it written neutrally?
 * Yes.
 * Does each claim have a citation?
 * Yes.
 * Are the citations reliable?
 * Yes, citations are excellent.

Music
Olivia Records was a Women's Separatist business in Los Angeles that produced women's music and concerts. Olivia Records was founded in 1973 by Jennifer Woodhul, Lee Schwing, Ginny Berson, and Helaine Harris and was originally located in Washington, D.C. Olivia Records sold nearly 2 million copies of albums with women performers and artists that were marketed to women. The record company eventually shifted from music to travel, and is now a Lesbian Travel Company called Olivia.

Music
Olivia Records was a Women's Separatist business in Los Angeles that produced women's music and concerts. Olivia Records was founded in 1973 by Jennifer Woodhul, Lee Schwing, Ginny Berson, and Helaine Harris and was originally located in Washington, D.C. Olivia Records sold nearly 2 million copies of albums with women performers and artists that were marketed to women. The record company eventually shifted from music to travel, and is now a Lesbian Travel Company called Olivia.

Sex and Gender Distinction

 * 1) Is each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic?
 * 2) * I think that the category that they are writing in is already pretty well developed. I think that they should add the first chunk of writing to the topic of "performing" or "doing" gender; it would fit better there.
 * 3) Does the article reflect all the perspectives represented in the published literature? Are any significant viewpoints left out or missing?
 * 4) * The whole article looks well rounded overall.
 * 5) Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?
 * 6) * The article is neutral, overall.
 * 7) Do you think you could guess the perspective of the author by reading the article?
 * 8) * No
 * 9) Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?
 * 10) * No
 * 11) Does the article make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people?
 * 12) * No
 * 13) Does the article focus too much on negative or positive information?
 * 14) * No. There are criticism sections in this article that refer to specific theories.
 * 15) Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors?
 * 16) * Medical News Today doesn't seem like a reliable source. It is a website, not a medical journal.
 * 17) Are there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources?
 * 18) * I think the two sentences from their first source is just enough. I also think that the short sentence from their second source is a good length too.
 * 19) Are there any unsourced statements in the article, or statements that you can't find stated in the references?
 * 20) * Not that I could find. The three sentences that they added are attributed to two different sentences.

The two sentences from the first source are a little difficult to read. It seems like they just drew out the explanation from the source for a long time. Maybe they can condense those two sentences.

Music
Olivia Records was a Women's Separatist business in Los Angeles that produced women's music and concerts. Olivia Records was founded in 1973 by Jennifer Woodhul, Lee Schwing, Ginny Berson, and Helaine Harris and was originally located in Washington, D.C. Olivia Records sold nearly 2 million copies of albums with women performers and artists that were marketed to women. The record company eventually shifted from music to travel, and is now a Lesbian Travel Company called Olivia.

Lesbian Separatism in the US
'Womyn's land', alternatively called 'Lesbian land' or the 'landdyke' movement (particularly in the 1970's) is the idea of separatism, normally on a separate plot of land. Some lesbian lands have practiced the idea of ecofeminism on these separate plots of land, which is the connection between the oppression of women and the oppression of nature by men. Access to temporary free land was often found through women's music festivals, where lesbians would network and strategized their plans for lesbian land.

My contributions:
For this article, I added the the section on music that came from feminist separatism. I added a whole paragraph about Olivia Records, which is a separatist business that produced women only music. Olivia Records eventually turned into Olivia, which is a lesbian cruise company. I also added a paragraph to the section on Lesbian separatism in the US. The paragraph was expanding on 'lesbian land'.

After looking over the entire article, myself and my group decided that there were no errors in writing style, citations, or missing any information. We decided that Cierra would add to the film section to find more separatist films and Nicole would add to the "reception of separatism" section.