User:Bkbrar/Memorization/Cire2002 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Bkbrar)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Bkbrar/Memorization - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Memorization

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I believe that your edit on the lead could improve the quality of that specific section. Your sentence, "Mental process undertaken in order to store in memory for later recall visual, auditory, or tactical information.", appears to be neutral, easy to understand, and reflects the most important information of the article. If anything, my main suggestion would be that you ensure that each section is balanced in terms of importance. Although everything looks to be in check to me, if one of the other sections contains a piece of information that can't be connected into your new statement, adding additional information to your lead sentence or taking out the previously mentioned piece of information could help keep the article's structure in check. You could also attach a reference to your new sentence if you really wanted to prove its undeniable validity, but that wouldn't be a necessity considering the sentence's accuracy.