User:Blackpnk/Carmen Leon/Aestheticfeast Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Blackpnk


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Carmen Leon
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead is a concise sentence that transitions into their content well. The content of the article is relevant to the topic (Carmen Leon) because they describe her job as a painter, and teacher, as well as her education, reconnection to the Chicane art movement, her experience as a muralist, and the programs she has taught and worked in. They also add that Carmen won a visual artist Calabash award. The artist Leon, also co-founded a gallery for women called Galleria Tonantzin, which is important to add because people like Carmen help amplify the art and voices of underrepresented communities. Although their content is relevant and helpful in summarizing the artist, the author includes Carmen's mentor, it feels out of place. They also include a quote from Carmen that expresses her gratitude to her mentor, and although it is cited, it doesn't seem to belong. Their content is neutral, and does not serve to persuade others. The sources the author used are accurate, and up to date. The structure of their article could improve with sections and section headings. If they decide to keep the mentor's impact on Carmen, they should put that in the education section of the article, and so forth. Their article has notability, meaning it has more than 2-3 sources cited. For their art section, instead of writing each sentence with the words "Leon...", they could write the pieces of art, their year, the exhibit they were featured in, etc. Their footnotes are well placed throughout the article.