User:BlazethePanda/Sex differences in autism/JHolman43 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:BlazethePanda


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BlazethePanda/Sex_differences_in_autism?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sex differences in autism

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead sort of includes an overview what you are discussing, but parts are worded insensitively. The part where it says women's autism is what causes problems (from a 2010 source.. so I guess not too surprising) could hopefully be changed to women or non men feeling the need to mask being what causes problems. Please look out for other instances of other poorly worded areas in the old article. This article definitely will benefit from the addition of newer sources, thank you.

The Background heading information could include a little more about Leo Kanner's study.

The Extreme Male brain Theory section is very interesting, but parts are difficult to understand; the part that was most difficult for me to read was about the "widespread abnormalities in interconnectivity" in the brain. Maybe you could just go on to explain this in a bit easier wording, or introduce it somehow.

Camouflaging is explained very well and I like the examples included, maybe when you say "small everyday objects" while discussing overstimulation, you could include the example of a fidget cube or other recognizable device.

There are a few grammar errors throughout, so you could just comb through. Your added information gives the topic more humanity and normalcy. All of the information you added is very important and useful, thank you for working on this article.