User:BlazethePanda/Sex differences in autism/Thegayginger Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BlazethePanda, Maxle.madness


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:BlazethePanda/Sex differences in autism - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sex differences in autism - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead of the current article is overly descriptive; it starts the article with too many details. It could be cut down and put into different sections within the rest of the article. The lead does have good information that is needed, but there is too much information to start the article.

The content of the article is well written and informative, the added sections and information in the draft pulls together the whole article.

The article feels unbiased and neutral, it's not pulling one way or the other. In the draft background section "Hans Asperger was one of the first people to study autism, yet all of his four study subjects were male." The way it is written with "yet" adds a sense of bias and outside feelings, it would feel more informative if "yet" was removed. Other than that, everything seems neutral.

The sources citied are reliable and well balanced, there's a wide variety of information pulled from the sources.

The article does seem well written, no obvious errors. It would be helpful to read through it a couple times and rephrase some of the sentences, some of them are hard to easily read.

Overall, the article is well done, it's clear and informative. The sections are well balanced, except for the lead being a little too long. The added information from the draft is needed to get more of an understanding of the topic, and it is informative. Everything is pretty good, just a few minor changes that will help the overall conciseness of the article.