User:Blestrel/American Indian Dance Theatre/Nealonc Peer Review

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-You did a great job on the links and resources connected to the into throughout the article.

- Definitely add more information as you find more sources

- Specify what group you are talking about in the beginning when you say "the group"

- The history section is a little choppy. Maybe try to connect some sentences to make it flow better?

- Right after [4] "These dances also entail music and costumes with a large focus on tradition", it is worded a little weird. How could you rephrase this to make it roll off the tongue?

- In Events, elaborate on the 2 Hawaiian groups collaborated with and what the performance was about.

- In Recognition, when was the Grammy nomination and what category?

~ In addition, how did people react to this? Was it supported? Were mainstream celebrities supportive? What was the reaction by everyone watching? Just expand more on these.

- In Other, add more... What was unique about their story-telling that inspired other tribes? Examples of their story-telling concepts? Just expand on this

- Other than these, just keep researching and adding more information:) Good Luck!!

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