User:BlondeBiologist/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Respiration (physiology)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.)

The reason I chose this article was that it was a relevant subject matter that is important to the course I am taking and an interesting topic to read about. I know quite a bit about the anatomy of respiration but not as much about the physiology. Respiration is a very important part of life and therefore I believe this is a very important topic with immense amount of details that make us function and work as human beings. My preliminary impression of the article was that it did not contain a ton of information and the information that was provided was a bit confusing in regards to the wording.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section


 * The introductory sentence has good content but is worded in an inconcise way that could confuse the reader
 * The lead section includes an overview of the major topics but condensing the paragraph and using  more mundane language would make it easier to understand
 * Overall has enough detail just needs to be rephrased in a few places

Content:


 * The content provided is relevant and up to date
 * The writer could provide a brief discussion about the subtopics that they provided in a list format so that the reader knows more about what they want to discuss in the article  or the important points without having to click the links and search for them
 * Could discuss more about the different types of respiration

Tone and Balance:


 * The article is written from a neutral perspective
 * There isn’t any biased opinions formed in the article or points that are trying to persuade the reader

Sources and References


 * The facts in the article are backed up by the source provided
 * More sources could be utilized by the writer to obtain more viewpoints and perspectives on the topic
 * This source was from 2010 so an updated source could provide up to date knowledge on the topic
 * The topic provided is a textbook it could be beneficial to include peer reviewed sources such as articles or journals from online sources to enhance their information
 * There was only one source provided to which I had to google the name in order to find the source a linked format would be easier for the reader
 * Additional sources need to be utilized to add more details to this article

Organization and Writing Quality:


 * The article needs to be reworded in many sections to provide a more clear concise explanation
 * Brief summaries should be added to the classification section
 * The grammar looks good from the section that is available
 * The organization of the article makes sense, but needs a little more structure especially in the classifications of respiration section

Images and Media:


 * The only images provided in this article are in the additional images section
 * The images provided don’t enhance the article in any way
 * the addition of a image showing the mechanism of respiration or the differences in animal compared to human could aid in further explanation for the lead section

Talk Page:


 * On the talk page most of the discussion is based on little changes with organization within the article, and also including types of respiration such as what happens in plants
 * Another discussion is on the addition of an aerobic or anaerobic section to the page
 * They also discussed a misinterpreted definition where they had a biochemical definition of respiration instead of a physiological definition

Overall Impressions:


 * This overall beginning page could still use some work to make it easier for readers to initially understand
 * The writer provides links to a variety of links that are well supported by references but this additional article has only one reference to support its facts
 * Overall I think the article is still underdeveloped it has two subtopics that have no information provided for them and other than the lead section further explanations are needed to provide information as to what is being discussed in the upcoming sections
 * Overall there is lots of good information I believe it just needs to be reorganized to create a better understanding and flow for the reader with additional sources to enhance the article