User:Bloomsnooze/The Love Fridge Chicago/Paytonfelix44 Peer Review

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ddisario

Bloomsnooze

Mikaylawtk

Dear.Jang


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The Lead includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article’s topic. Specifically, the first sentence of the Lead does a great job summarizing the entire organization in a few words. I like how you used the phrase “mutual aid” and included a hyperlink to the definition of that phrase because it clearly describes that there are multiple organizations involved with their mission.

Each sentence of the Lead gives a short summary of each of the major sections of the article without including anything extra that is not discussed later in the article. However, when you are discussing how The Love Fridge was started it reads, “was started by a group of people.” I think that you should expand a little bit more on this. Instead of a group of people, you could say something like “Ramon Norwood and a team of 15 others…”

Otherwise, I think you did a great job with the Lead. It is concise and gives an efficient overview of the information included later in the article.

Mission

I think you did a great job with the first paragraph in this section. It is well written and gives a complete overview about what the organization is and what they aim to do in Chicago. However, the second paragraph in this section needs to be reworked. I think it would be helpful to give more of an introduction about what the painted art on each fridge is before you begin discussing what the goal of it is. Some questions to consider:

·      Who paints the fridges? (Volunteers? Members of the organization?)

·      What do they paint on the fridges?

Overall, this concept of the painted art on the fridges needs to be expanded and rewritten. The wording is slightly unclear, and it is confusing to read. Specifically, the last sentence in the paragraph, “the provides residents to talk about…” I am not sure what this means.

History

The information included in this section is neutral and informative. However, I think it could be expanded. For example, you state that The Love Fridge was founded during the pandemic when food insecurity in Chicago was high. As a reader I wonder:

·      How did The Love Fridge combat food insecurity? (even if it was in a small way)

·      What impact did it have on the neighborhoods struggling the most? (you say these were the South and West side neighborhoods)

Additionally, you mention that The Love Fridge was inspired by similar organizations operating in New York City during the pandemic. I think it could be helpful to expand on this idea further. What are these organizations called? If they have a Wikipedia page you could hyperlink them in the document.

Overall, the content included here is sufficient, but I think you should go into more detail about it.

After reading through this section, I’m not sure that “history” is the correct title for the content that follow. This organization has only been operating since 2020 which isn’t a very long time. Would you say that it is “historical?” Some ideas:

·      Origins

·      Beginnings

·      Founders

Locations

The information written in this section is up-to-date and concise. I added hyperlinks in the document to each of the neighborhoods in Chicago that have an existing Wikipedia page. A small suggestion I have would be to include where the 22 out of the 23 fridges that are open 24/7 are located.

Contributors

This section was a little bit confusing to me. The first paragraph is well written and makes logical sense under the title “contributors.” However, the paragraph that follows doesn’t seem to fit well with the category that you’ve placed it under. I do think this information about their donation guidelines is important to include so I would suggest either creating a new section or giving the existing section a new title. For example, something like “operations” might work better.

Another thing that could be useful to include within this section is highlighting a few of the organizations biggest or most impactful donors. Is there a specific organization who has consistently supported The Love Fridge?

Fridge hosts

This section is neutral and informative, but I think it is a little unclear. When I was reading it I was confused about what it actually means to be a “fridge host.” I think it would be helpful if in the first sentence you gave a broad definition about what this entails. Additionally, towards the end of the paragraph you mention “like The Love Fridge they too have to follow certain rules…” What are these rules? Are you talking about the donation regulations? You need to clarify.

Sources and References

You’ve done a good job putting together a list of sources from the range of years that the organization has been in operation. I see there is one from when they first opened in 2020 and there is also a few from 2022 and 2023. Overall, I do think the page needs some more content and information about the organization so I think you should be able to increase the number of sources you’ve included. The quality of the sources looks good for the most part. You’ve included articles from major news outlets such as CNN and The Chicago Tribune. However, two of your sources come directly from The Love Fridges website. You will need to remove these and replace them with a news article.

General Feedback

Overall, I think you did a great job laying out what this organization is about in a neutral way. The three major things I noticed while going through your page is missing information (most of which I’ve laid out what I think you should add under each of the section titles), poor organization (again, this is detailed under each of the section titles that I think need to be worked on, but mostly I think if you change the titles of the sections that I pointed out it will look great), and including only credible news sources in your bibliography.

Beyond what I have already detailed under each section title here is some additional information I think would be important to include about the organization:

·      Recent news about what the organization is doing today – are the participating in community events? Hosting community events? Etc.

·      Specific statistics or evidence about how this organization has impacted or benefited the surrounding community.

·      How is the organization structured? Do they have a hierarchical system? Is there a president? Etc.

I enjoyed reading about your organization, great job! I think this is going to be a great page to add to Wikipedia.