User:BlueCat976/Senet/Wikieditor1685 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BlueCat976


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BlueCat976/Senet?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Senet
 * Senet

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * Great original content added and elaboration on existing content
 * Add total number of game pieces? Don't get too specific at the very beginning though, it spoils the fin in reading the rest of the article

Clarity:


 * "History" is a little bit of a vague title. History of what?
 * Make sure your titles describe exactly what is going on, break it up and get specific if possible. Make sure readers know exactly what they're reading about

Coverage Balance:


 * All general descriptions cover the entire history of the game


 * I would attempt to break up the history section into two or three subsections if possible. Are there defined periods of time for this subject that could serve as sort of a periodization effect?

Spelling/Grammar/Capitalization/Format: ***I am being SUPER picky because your article absolutely rocks!!!


 * The content is great! Make sure to double check capitalization of proper nouns throughout the article, ex: the S in Senet is lowercase when it shouldn't be
 * Rename "article" (title of the first paragraph) to something more descriptive
 * Break up content to get more specific if possible, an example being maybe a grouping like "Cultural Significance", "Gameplay Rules and Variation"

Original Contributions:


 * Love that you bolded them!
 * So much original content, well worded and neutral in tone, fits right in!

Questions:


 * Are there variations in game play? For example, if you go to someone else's house and play Uno, they use stacking rules, but you don't. Anything like that? Sorry if you have no idea what I mean...

Neutrality:


 * All content is neutral, did not see any issues with this

Sources:


 * Well done! Easy to read and identify
 * So many sources!

Additional Comments/Notes:


 * Thanks so much for the side notes and easily identifiable bolded content, made this so easy to edit. This article is absolutely fantastic and I am excited to see the final product. Great job, I am using this as an example to help me with editing my own article. I had to be extremely picky with my editing:)
 * I did not want to confuse you, so I did not make many physical edits to your draft. Possible edits are described in detail above.