User:BlueCat976/Trittys/GooseJanus Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BlueCat976


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BlueCat976/Trittys?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Trittys

Lead
The new introduction paragraph is greatly expanded. You did a great job adding meaningful information. I also noticed how you brought some information from the intro paragraph to the layout and background paragraph. I think that was a good choice. The intro paragraph also is organized in the same was as the page, as in the first couple of sentences reflect the origin, the next set represents the layout and background. That helps with the overall flow of the page. Only thing I noticed was that the citation looks strange inside of the parenthesis, I am not sure which is correct formatting, but I thought it was important to note.

Content
The content is directly on topic. You don't go overboard with information. the part in the origin where its pointed out how the ten tribe split was made to represent the male population specifically was great to note. I also enjoy the last section about the original ten phylai. However, I think the evidence is a bit confusing. Are the latter parts that start with cf. meant to be references/citations or something else?

Tone and Balance/Sources and References
Not much for me to add on this topic. The tone and balance is even. The only things that I would add to this would be on your section in the Layout and Background section. The third paragraph has no citations, even if its in the same group as the 10th citation it would benefit from a citation, as it looks barren without one. In addition, the times were you bring up the two main functions would benefit from a phrase such as "Jessica Paga argues/interprets that..." or something along those lines. As of now it could be construed that the functions were listed during the time they were implemented, if this is the case then it is fine as it is. However, if Paga is the one arguing the functions it would beneficial to note them in the article.

Organization
The new sections are perfectly on topic and are placed in a good order. Everything added is well written and concise. The only thing I can point out is that when I am reading it outload some sections are tough (whether that be due to sentence structure or topic complexity), this may be due to my surface level understanding of the subject, maybe rereading your additions out loud will help you identify parts that don't flow smoothly. Either way the information is very dense and give readers a great load of information in well thought out sections.

The spacing out of different topics within sections is a great decision that I will implement into my own page, seeing a giant paragraph of information is daunting. The break in topics help alleviate that.

Images
The images help break up the monotony of the page a great deal. Especially with something that could be considered bland like Trittyes. The map of Attica is a great choice, however, I do wonder if there is a map that labeled each trittys, It may be tough to find one of high quality and that is accurate but the page would greatly benefit from it.