User:Bluebanisters11/Daniel Sotomayor/Britneymegnath Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bluebanisters11


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Bluebanisters11/Daniel Sotomayor
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
It seems the draft is incomplete so I can do a better peer review later whenever you are able to compose more information.

For now, my suggestions would definitely be to better organize the article. For example, in mine I started with a lead. The lead listed when and where Dunlap was born, along with a brief overview of her career. I also listed what works she has best known for and an award she received. A good way to organize the article might be having a career and personal life section. If you have enough information, you could organize the career section into different time periods like I did. For example, I included a section on cartooning, other works, and then present days. I think that organizing the article like this makes it much more comprehensible and informational. When someone is reading something on Wikipedia they want it to be easy to find what they want to find, so that's why I think this is important.

Definitely work on compiling your sources, this is probably the most important thing. Include primary sources that are works by your author and secondary sources that help to contextualize the atmosphere of the time.

Also definitely try to keep an objective tone throughout.