User:Bluemoon41/Shahjehan Aapa/Drabkin247 Peer Review

General info
Bluemoon41
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Bluemoon41/Shahjehan Aapa
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Doesn't exist

Evaluate the drafted changes
I need to begin by saying that this is excellent work. Your sections are separated perfectly and there is a ton of content that is all relevant to Aapa's life. The sources are mostly scholarly and most of yours claims are backed up by them. I also love how you linked certain words such as names and events to other Wikipedia articles. I did notice that you used some passionate language in your writing. I would say to limit this in order to preserve neutrality. An example of such a word is "heinous." I think that it would be appropriate to quote a word like this from a direct source because then you are using such a word with another person's mouth, not your own. Apart from this, I am very much impressed.