User:Blueram1/Insect social networks/PricklyFish Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Blueram1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Blueram1/Insect social networks (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Blueram1/Insect_social_networks?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Insect social networks

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The leading section is quite small and does not provide much detail about that the topic/article is about or what information will be discussed within the article itself. It does not explain the major aspects of the article. This article would further benefit from expanding the leading section by explaining what an insect social network is, mentioning what the major sections of this article will be, and potentially some examples when explaining what an insect social network is. The sentence present for the leading paragraph has left me slightly confused as it does not really explain what a social network is, only that is is used as a model for animal networks.

Content
The content you have added/drafted in my opinion is very relevant to your topic and is well explained. I feel as though I have a good understanding of what you are trying to explain regarding the different status levels of ants and termites, as well as their roles and physical differences. As well, I like how you expanded and rewrote the Disease Transmission section and provided an real life example with the termites.

One suggestion I do have for the Disease Transmission section would be to potentially rename it as "Disease Prevention". I found that this section more so talked about how insects help prevent the rest of their colony from becoming ill, rather than how disease can transmit throughout colony. I'm also curious now if other insects also display this behavior or how they might display it. Another suggestion I have would be to add your contribution underneath the header "Social Contact Networks" as I feel as though your information fits within this description. I would also potentially revisit the sentence "The drones leave the colony on a nuptial flight or mating flight, find a virgin queen to reproduce with, and then die shortly after." as I did find the wording here to be quite close to your reference, though that is only my opinion.

Tone and Balance
I found your contribution to be neutral in tone and I do not feel as though I am persuaded one way or another regarding your content. I feel as though your content is well rounded and that no section is represented more than another.

Sources and References
I would use caution solely using Britannica for your only source regarding termite social networks and paraphrasing the content. I would suggest using journal articles rather than this sole source as it would make your contribution here more reliable/reputable. I have found some secondary resources regarding the social behavior of termites that I can link here if needed. I would also suggest finding a journal article to perhaps replace your first reference listed as there may be more reputable resources available regarding this topic. Your sources are from a diverse spectrum of authors and access to the links do work as well. I'd also like to point out that your 8th and 9th references are the same. I'm not sure if this was intentional but I thought I'd point it out!

Organization
As noted within the content section, I do think your contribution is well explained though I did notice some small grammatical and spelling errors. Within your first section of your draft there are 4 errors; the scientific name of the Argentine ants is not fully italicized, the scientific name of big-headed ants is no fully italicized, the spelling of castes is incorrect, and when you mention pheromones in the paragraph below this "pheromone methods" is written as one word rather than two. I did noticed that within your section titles "in" is capitalized in one section but is lowercase in the other. As well, I did notice one of your headings references members of the order (Hymenopterans) while the other references the order overall (Blattodea). As mentioned above I feel like your contribution could fit nicely within the "Social Contact Networks" section as your first two topics seem to be similar in content and would pair nicely together in one section. For example, having the heading "Social Networks" and then perhaps subsections labelled "In Hymenoptera" and "In Blattodea". The article does seem to flow quite well in my opinion.

This is an interesting topic and I'm surprised the page for this topic is stub-class! I enjoyed reading the draft of your contribution for your article!