User:Blusolace/The Entire History of You/Daisja30 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Blusolace
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: The Entire History of You

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? No
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? It is concise.

Lead evaluation
The lead is well written.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No

Content evaluation
The content added was mainly just grammatical fixes.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? For the most part, yes.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Yes
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Yes
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No content was added on this section.

Tone and balance evaluation
The "analysis" section is very critical about Liam's decisions. It feels like it wants the reader to feel like Liam was the bad guy in the story. I also feel like section is very brief as well.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? No
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current? Fairly
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Sources and references evaluation
There were only small changes made that did not require sources to be added.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? No
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? N/a

Organization evaluation
The organization flows well.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? No
 * What are the strengths of the content added? Nothing really.
 * How can the content added be improved? There should be more added.

Overall evaluation
Overall, it is already a fair article. It can be hard finding exactly what to add, as I have noticed. However, try including an analyzation of the two main characters.