User:Bmarra/Maurice Vellekoop/Cmcopti Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Brian's @Bmarra.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bmarra/Maurice_Vellekoop?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Maurice Vellekoop

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall the changes that have been made so far look promising and relevant! Everything that has been added up until now seems to meet Wikipedia's guidelines, further establishes Maurice as a notable figure, and proves why he deserves to have a Wikipedia page.

I don't believe you've added all the information you have found on him yet, so forgive me for this review being sparse.

I like the new sections that you've set up such as Artistry in Comics and Personal Life. I think dividing the information to keep it from being in walls of text allows the reader to easily find what they're looking for. I'm unsure how much information you have on Maurice, however; if there's not enough to fill up these sections with a few sentences, I might consider reducing the amount of new sections. This may help the article visually look stronger and less sparse. While the blocks of text aren't ideal for reading, they do make the article look more cohesive and filled out, in my opinion.

Perhaps in the book section you could give a brief one sentence summary about each book?

I would also ensure that you add more references (especially secondary sources) to ensure Wikipedia approves of the sources!

All in all, the draft looks good so far!