User:Bmarra/Maurice Vellekoop/TeamTalonflame Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Brian @Bmarra


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Bmarra/Maurice_Vellekoop


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Maurice Vellekoop

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead/Organization

Overall, this article is much easier to look at, as you've isolated the important main info in the lead from details on his personal and early life. If his focus is specifically on queer material, it may fit to include that he's gay in the lead as well.

I also see you have another section called Artistry in Comics which I'm curious to see when it's done. Does this cover some of his aims/goals?

Sources

I'm wondering if there are any additional reviews out there on his books from newspapers or something. The book you got will be immensely helpful, though, and definitely an important contribution to the article. I don't know the exact copyright restrictions, but including an image of its cover would be a good addition if possible.

Overall, your changes enhanced the existing article by neatly organizing it and adding more info on Vellekoop's background.