User:Bmdbt/Janet Gourlay/Kbtkxh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bmdbt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bmdbt/Janet_Gourlay?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Janet Gourlay

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your lead should probably be changed to an early life section, as the lead is for a quick overview of the main thing she is known for, not for background about her early life. If you add one or two more things about her early life, you could add an entire section for this. I would move the bolded section about Janet and Margaret being the first women to get permission to excavate to after the existing information on her joining Margaret or rework it a little more, as currently the background context of Janet joining for Margaret's second season is missing. I love the added section on what was found within the Mut Complex, but would reword the part about various other items. I would consider adding a publications section as you mention several of her written works. The final sentence about Margaret's health seems to be a little out of place, either needing more context or to be moved to the end of the section on Janet and Margaret's excavations.

Sidenote for the article overall: if there is a picture you can add, I would consider adding it.