User:Bmiddour/Mespilia globulus/Diqi Yan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bmiddour


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bmiddour/Mespilia_globulus?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * none

Evaluate the drafted changes
- 'Mespilia globulus ... in the class Echinoidea', this is a run on sentence, you can separate it into 2 sentenced with the first describing the common and commercial name of M.globulus and the second describe which phylum and class it came from.

- I think the 'which includes starfish, sea ... sand dollars' can be deleted, as you only need to focus on the species you are describing. Also at the beginning this species is referred to as 'sphere sea urchin', so I don't think the other related classes matters.

- 'M.globulus are members of ... male and female.' I think it is kind of redundant to define gonochoric two times, and since you already have the term linked to a page, I don't think you need to explain it.

- 'They then developed ... in order to then ... young urchins.', I think you can delete in order to, also typo: metamorphosize/metamorphose*

- In life cycle and mating behaviors, you can link the following: fertilization, brooding, peristome, concavities, petaloids, planktonic larvae, metamorphosize. keep in mind that wikipedia is for general public who may not have the basic knowledge of the general anatomy of the species (as a class), it is better to 'dumb' thing down to a easy reading level, if you cannot find a simple way to describe something, linking is helpful as they will guide the reader to the respective page.

- You have the general life cycle but not mating behaviors.

- I see you have the generally description of this species but with no citation, be-sure to add where you got the information from after each sentence.

- I see you have basically copied and pasted from your second resource, this is against the goal of this project and wikipedia plagiarism policy. In your second resource (sealifebase.ca) if you scroll down to life cycle and mating behavior, they also have a references, this might help you to get started on the assignment as you need minimum of 12 primary research journal articles (I also believe 6 of them must be peer-reviewed?) to summarize the life cycle, habitat, appearance and all other characteristics of your species.

- Good luck!