User:Bnthomas17/Gates of the Arctic National Park and Preserve/Clhild Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bnthomas17


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bnthomas17/Gates_of_the_Arctic_National_Park_and_Preserve?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gates of the Arctic National Park and Preserve

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like that the climate section was added to because it is very short and doesn't include a lot of information. I like the sentence about warming temperatures, but it doesn't flow the best with the sentence before. I think there could be a new section or paragraph for climate change and its effects that is separate from the general climate in the park. I noticed that in the drafted sentence under the ecology section of the article, it says "affect the" twice before caribou population instead of just once. Other than that, I think this was a great addition to the information about caribou in the park and it is very concise.