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underlined sections are my original edits to the substance of the article

Edits to Motives of picture brides:

 * Some have found evidence that picture brides were not infrequently educated at the high school or college level and were thus more emboldened to seek out new opportunities abroad.
 * There is, however, little to no indication that the brides were sold to their husbands by their families.

Edits to Immigration

 * created a second paragraph
 * Likewise, Korean immigration to Hawaii was halted by Japan after Korea's new status as a Japanese protectorate in 1905. Picture brides, however, were an exception. While the ethnic Korean labor force could no longer enter the U.S. from Hawaii in 1907, by 1910 groups of picture brides from Korea had begun immigrating to the West Coast.
 * In 1910, Korean men outnumbered women ten to one within the United States. By 1924 the population of Korean women had grown, the numbers reaching three men to one woman. This was due to many Korean girls already within the U.S. borders reaching marriage age, as well as the arrival of around 1,066 brides.

Added to Bibliography

 * Yang, E.S. (1984). Korean Women of America: From Subordination to Partnership, 1903-1930. Amerasia Journal, 11(2), 1-28. UCLA Asian American Studies Center.
 * Macmillan, Michael E. (November 1985). Unwanted Allies: Koreans as Enemy Aliens in World War II. Hawaiian Journal of History, 19, 179-203. Hawaiian Historical Society.
 * Shin, Linda. (April 1975). Koreans in America, 1903-1945. Amerasia Journal, 3(1), 32-39. UCLA Asian American Studies Center.

Edits to Motives of picture brides

 * linked to American Dream in " seek out new opportunities abroad. "
 * linked to Bride buying in " sold to their husbands "
 * fixed error in Yang Eun Sik citation
 * fixed error in Michael E. Macmillan citation

Edits to Immigration

 * added another source to back up claim of "However, there was a loophole in the agreement that allowed wives and children to immigrate to be with their husbands and fathers." (Edward T. Chang source)
 * linked to Gentlemen's Agreement of 1907
 * linked to Immigration Act of 1924
 * changed " This was due to many Korean girls already within the U.S. borders reaching marriage age, as well as the arrival of around 1,066 brides" to " This was due to many Korean girls already within the U.S. borders reaching marriage age, as well as the arrival of between 950 to 1,066 brides" because of differing information between two sources and cited Edward T. Chang source for the 950 figure

Edits and additions to Bibliography

 * Chang, Edward T. Riverside, California: The Young Oak Kim Center for Korean American Studies at the University of California Riverside, 2019. Print.
 * changed order of sources in bibliography to be in alphabetical order

Edits to Motives of picture brides

 * changed " Some have found evidence that picture brides were not infrequently educated at the high school or college level and were thus more emboldened to seek out new opportunities abroad " to " There is evidence suggesting that picture brides were not infrequently educated at the high school or college level and were thus more emboldened to seek out new opportunities abroad. "

Edits to Problems with the practice

 * The bonds of these marriages were tenuous enough that bride Lee Young Oak and her husband Chung Bong Woon were met with praise and relief by their fellow Koreans in Hawaii for the relative success and happiness of their marriage while on their honeymoon in Honolulu.
 * added citation to Edward T. Chang source for previous claim
 * added new paragraph
 * added "who" in sentence "Some married husbands turned out to be alcoholics..." to make it "Some married husbands who turned out to be alcoholics..."

Response to peer review of my edits
In this section I will address the proposed changes to my edits of the article Picture bride detailed in peer reviews by EpicCarnage12 and User:Maame-Amadee.


 * The dated citations are due to the nature of the topic itself. There are scant sources on picture brides, and even recent scholarship on them can be rather gaunt. Picture brides tend to be a small section of peer reviewed texts on the greater phenomenon of Korean immigrants in the Americas before the Second World War. In fact, primary sources are also very scant. Unfortunately, I had to take what I could get my hands on.
 * Appropriate images will be difficult to find for this article, though I will keep trying. I'm not terribly worried about finding a suitable picture as there are a few visual aids in the article already, so I don't consider it a high priority.
 * While I am not the one who wrote the sentence regarding "the spread of the Japanese people," I do strongly agree this wording should be amended. It is reminiscent of the increase in anti-Japanese sentiment in the United States during the time period this article deals with and does not belong in the article. I will be changing it myself.
 * This article deals with the phenomenon of the picture bride, which is a term historians use specifically to refer to the passage of mainly Japanese and Korean women into the United States after the passing of the 1907 Gentlemen's Agreement. The Gentlemen's Agreement blocked Japanese migrant workers from emigrating to U.S. territories with the exception of immediate family of those who had already emigrated, such as a spouse, therefore leaving the door open for brides to emigrate. This applied to Koreans because of Korea's status as a Japanese protectorate circa 1905 and then its status as a Japanese colony circa 1910. This terminology is specific to an East Asian context. Other brides of a very similar nature are typically called "mail-order brides" and while the terms and the methods of these two phenomena are connected and similar, this is a different context. It would not be appropriate to discuss mail-order brides in any sort of depth in the picture bride article when there is already a separate article for mail-order brides.

Edits to Immigration

 * changed "For example, 86.7 percent of Japanese admitted to U.S. prior to Gentlemen's Agreement were men..." to "For example, 86.7 percent of Japanese admitted to U.S. prior to the Gentlemen's Agreement were men..."
 * changed "The spread of the Japanese people grew so rapidly that, in 1897, the Japanese..." to " By 1897, the Japanese..."