User:BornUnderPunches/Frankenstein's Monster/Turquoise98 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BornUnderPunches


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User
 * BornUnderPunches/Frankenstein's_Monster?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Frankenstein's monster

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) Lead - I think you could add a few more supporting sentences to your introduction to make it a little stronger. You have a few sentences that are a little long and could be mad into two. However, overall it is a strong beginning with sound arguments that you continue to backup. Overall, great beginning, could just add a few supports, that's all!
 * 2) Content - Overall, your content is strong and has sound arguments. You have a lot of quotes from your arguments, which makes it much stronger! I like how you talked about the design of the monster by bringing attention to the time period of the 18th century, which strengthens your content. Again, I think adding a few more supporting sentences of your own would make it that much stronger and drive home the points that the authors you mentioned have made. Overall, I think it's great and could just use a few supports to help support the quotes you've used, otherwise, overall great job!
 * 3) Tone and Balance - Overall, I don't think you have any significant issues of tone, because you make it clear who is speaking and what each author clearly stated. I do think in terms of balance, you could add a few more sentences of your own words, only because you have a lot of quotes and I think adding in some points that aren't word for word from other works would just help strengthen it a bit. I think you have a lot of really great quotes and their very strong, I just think having a few more sentences that support these claims would also just help to support the arguments a bit.
 * 4) Sources - I think you did a great job with introducing your sources and having correct citations; you have a lot of quotes from your citations, which is great! Overall, the sources part is very strong and I don't think really needs any changes at all.
 * 5) Organization - Your overall organization is great and I don't think needs any changes, it all flows very nicely and I don't think needs any critiques or changes.
 * 6) Overall, this draft is very clear and concise, and has really good references that help to strengthen it. The few changes that may help are very minor and will be easy changes to make; overall, excellent draft!