User:Bpalanisamy/Nanoporous materials/Aly Ross Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bpalanisamy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Bpalanisamy/Nanoporous materials


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nanoporous materials

Lead

 * A strong start! A lot of terminology off the bat, maybe include some more definitions?
 * It might help to switch up the structure of your lead, since you define void in your second paragraph but use it in the first. It might also be good to define the structure of a nanoporous material, then explain why open/closed pores matter.
 * As a layman, it'd also be nice to have the definition of bulk phase.
 * You've got a lot of good information here, it might be enough for a whole extra section (could split off how to make nanoporous materials into it's own section to add content)
 * Promising is a loaded word (a little bit making a value judgement), maybe change it to something more neutral (e.g. a developing area of research, have become a popular area of research)?
 * I think all of these i.e.'s have their own Wikipedia pages, linking them could make the article look more ingrained.

Applications

 * Is Adsorption a proper noun? (same with Electrical resistivity & conductivity)
 * What is this advantageous over?
 * This a good explanation, I think that a formula (if it exists) would make it look even more impressive.
 * All of the applications sound cool! This section is well developed.

Classifications

 * The content is good, but the structure could be more straight forward. Maybe start with IUPAC definition (provide frame of reference) and then go to your paragraph. I think this would strengthen things a lot, especially since the writing is strong.

Overall notes:

The content is really interesting! I think this could benefit from some more definitions of terms and some changes in structure.

Thoughts on structure:


 * Possibly start with the lead and follow with classifications. This way you can establish a frame of reference for the reader of the sizes and differences.
 * If you start with classifications, then you can reference pore size in applications directly (if known)
 * You may also have enough information in p2 of the lead to make a “creation of nanoporous materials” section.