User:Bpalanisamy/Nanoporous materials/Donnarahgoshay Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bpalanisamy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bpalanisamy/Nanoporous_materials?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nanoporous materials

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Introduction
The introduction is very detailed, which I really appreciate! I think there's a lot of great information but you may be able to actually split it up into a couple of sections, rather than having it all in the introduction. In the 1st and 2nd paragraphs, you include a lot of detail about the structure of nanoporous material, so perhaps that can be its own section. You might also add an "Commonly used nanoporous materials" section to discuss activated carbon and zeolites. I like that you talked about the importance of it in the 3rd paragraph!

I also noticed a couple parts of the introduction that felt a bit choppy in terms of sentence structure, so maybe rephrasing some things will help with that.

Applications of Nanoporous Materials
First, I noticed that a few words were accidentally capitalized, so just make sure to fix the grammar there. I really like the examples you discussed here, however you could probably structure this section a bit differently. Maybe add subsections for each example and discuss the nanoporous materials in those sections. Also, the first paragraph is a little lengthy (the first 2 sentences are like an intro to the section), so it's just a lot to digest without breaking it up. You also talk about "long-term implants" here and I think it would be cool to elaborate on that in this section! Seems like a really great example for nanoporous materials.

For some reason, "Confusingly" and "More correctly" are not sitting well with me. I feel like they're helping the reader understand what's happening but it has a weird tone. Maybe re-writing this section in a way with a neutral tone would be better.

Classification of Nanoporous Materials
Again, you could probably at 2 sub-sections under this section: "Classification by size" and "Classification by type of network material" or something like that. I just think it's a lot easier to read that way. Overall I really like this section!

Overall, the article looks pretty complete. I'm curious to know if there are any companies currently using nanoporous materials for specific products, so you could always add something like that in your applications section. I would also like to know more about the history of nanoporous materials, if you can find information on that. I think the article just needs a bit more structure/organization but content looks complete to me.

-Donna