User:Bradburyc/Rhodesian Bush War/Srenman Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Bradburyc
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Bradburyc/Rhodesian Bush War

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
I believe that the lead could be updated to reflect your new information on communist ideology! The article itself has a strong lead and overview of the Rhodesian Bush War. I think it could be improved by including a sentence about Cold War tensions.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
All the content seems relevant and up-to-date. Since the event is in the past, the sources and history will not be as recent. I think absolutely adding to the Cold War section would benefit the article. I think that is a huge part of the Rhodesian Bush war, especially given what we have learned in this class. International meddling should be highlighted in this article.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
I found the tone to be relatively neutral. When writing about communism, one has to be careful about remaining neutral. I don't think your paragraph was super pro or against but more reporting the facts. I don't feel persuaded one way or another about the ideology.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
Your citation was academic which is good! I would suggest to maybe find a few more sources to really flesh out your ideas.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
Your writing was super clear and concise. I think that the article in itself was organized well too. The section about communism would probably fall well under the pre-existing Cold War header. I think you could probably elaborate more on the pre-existing Cold War section to make the article really well rounded.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
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For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

New Article Evaluation
N/A

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
I think the article will be more complete with your addition about communist ideology. The war obviously had international influences so this section will paint a better picture of what actually happened during the Rhodesian Bush War. I think readers will also be able to understand how colonialism and neocolonialism impact the country still today. However, I would make sure to find a few more sources and get another scholar's perspective. Good work!