User:BradenHeath/Geography of media and communication/BeeEdson224 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BradenHeath


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BradenHeath/Geography_of_media_and_communication?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Geography of media and communication

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead of this article has a small addition to it which is a welcome edit, however, how can you incorporate the addition you made regarding the history of the geographical communication? The lead paragraph itself is solid, I assume it was a previously written one as it doesn't have a different font as added to the bottom, so don't worry about changing it. I think it could use more on the different sections within the article because there is more in it than just the history of this communication theory. This lead is not yet too overloaded so you can add more safely to contribute to the completion of the lead. Think, if you were a reader with little time on your hand, like a college student studying before a test, how can you ensure the reader will know as much as possible in a paragraph?

Content

The content you have added so far is well done and has great structure. I am impressed with the fact that all of your references were written after 2000. I think this could cover a Wiki equity gap but was not marked as such. Try to use the ideas below to spread the ideas out. Also, if you are writing on history try to find older articles because they provide different viewpoints and reflections on even the same topics.

Tone and Balance

Make sure to neutralize your words as much as possible. I try not to use words like "more/most", "effective", or any other word that suggests something is working overtime unless explicitly needed or you can quote it from an author. I think you also have a really good article to include all countries and how they are disproportionally affected. This area is not even covered in your selected article! An entire section could be called "global communication" and references scholars whos focus is in international studies of geographical communication. If you want I can link you to some articles that are titled for my article (Political Economy of Communication) for examples of national positions on communication. Countries who are developing tend to have different access to technology then we do, like Twitter, for example. Asian, African or Middle Eastern Countries tend to put a lot of their faith in outlets like WhatsApp which recently crashed and caused many to not have access to basic things like healthcare or family. Instances like these could really flush out an international argument in here.

Sources and References

I think your references are great, I just need more. Almost every single sentence you write that did not come from your own brain wholly should be backed up with a citation, this is Wikipedia Standard. Also you can try adding additional readings to the bottom of the page as sometimes it can help. The sources seem to be accurately defined in your new addition. Again, I just need more literature on all sides, all walks of life and all types of individuals. You have a great start on this but even outlining how each continent may have geographical communication differentiate.

Organization

I think it is a bit clumped together. Think about how you want to sub-head things. Remember this is your sandbox or you can even create another if you want to copy the whole page to find out how you want to separate and divide different topics. I even did this just to check for spelling and wording errors. But your piece on history could fit under the main history heading. I would also go through and double check the article you are using for those small mistakes just to be through. It could even help you find your own mistakes, which I could not see. Great start! Just diversify and add more sources and you will be set!

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