User:Bradley Silvernail/Africa-South Korea Relations/Juliagonsman Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Bradley Silvernail, Jeonghyeon9623)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bradley%20Silvernail/Africa-South_Korea_Relations?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The references do not seem reliable due to them not being completely cited. the links do work, however they have red on them and are not fully completed.
 * 1) What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? This could be information, writing, etc. that you think your classmate should not change and/or should expand on.
 * 2) The article does well at giving background information, which educates the reading on the history leading up to the African involvement. The article gives information on what events led up to South Africa and Ethiopias involvement in South Korea, as well as why it began.
 * 3) Where do you see room for improvement or further development? Make sure to explain why these changes would improve the article.
 * 4) This article could improve by emphasizing and giving more information on how the African states made a difference in South Korea. This article lacks much information and could be helped by adding different types of sources, as well as different types of information. Information such as who led the armies, or how the troops did would be important since it is unknown of the significance they played.
 * 5) What's the most important thing the authors could do to improve the article?
 * 6) The most important thing the authors could do is add more information since the page is lacking with total information. The information the readers are going off of is repeating, leading the readers to only grasp part of the importance of South Korean relations. Additionally, there is no solid point to why the connect between African states and South Korea is important, since the article so far is only giving historical background on it.
 * 7) Is the article well-organized? Does the structure make sense?
 * 8) The article is well organized, it just lacks information. The article itself brings you through periodically, which makes reading and understanding the information quite easy. However, due to the lack of information, it is repetitive and does not grasp why these two concepts are directly important to each other.
 * 9) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * 10) I find the historical background very interesting, which would help mu own article on Cameroon to show how the country has either faired well or worse with the distribution of privatization.
 * 11) As a reader, what else would you like to know about this topic? [Of course, this information may not be readily available in all cases, but it can help generate interesting directions for their research]
 * 12) I would like to find out how African countries, especially the ones who helped South Korea during world war 2 are dealing with South Korea and how well their diplomatic ties are doing. In modern days, South Korea is very technologically advanced, leading me to find if African countries are exporting materials and how their international relations are doing, especially in countries such as Ethiopia since civil war is now occurring.

The viewpoints of how South Korean relations are underrepresented, the information of the importance is the topic is not fully there. This will most likely be changed since you will continue adding information.