User:Braeden Ewuk/Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area/Lukedux8 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Braeden Ewuk, BraedonLW, TJmukuro, Trustham02


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Braeden%20Ewuk/Widgeon_Valley_National_Wildlife_Area?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great beginning to the article! I think you provide sustainable context for the reader to paint a picture of what the wildlife area consists of. Also I think it is important how you put emphasis on the declining number of freshwater wetland ecosystems, this sets president for the whole article as the reader knows that it is a pressing issue that is relevant right now. Good job with in text links as well, there were a couple terms that I was unfamiliar with but links are provided right in the text to familiarize the reader.

One of the things that I learned while reading this article is the pacific flyway. Obviously migratory birds have a route in which they fly but I didnt know any terminology. Really this whole article is teaching me things, I had no idea a national wildlife area existed so close to where I used to live (Port Coquitlam), let alone all the fauna that inhabits the area such as red tailed hawks, beavers and bobcats.

For the western screech owl paragraph, I would try to put more information about the relationship between the western screech owl and the widgeon Vally national wildlife area specifically. Its great adding the risk status and what effects the population of the owl but personally id try to stay on track of the relationship between the protected area and the owl.

I know its just a rough draft but found this sentence and it didnt make much sense, "Increased frequency of extreme weather such as storms and floods fell trees used as shelter by the Western Screech owl." However now that Im re reading it I understand what's being said, maybe just reword it a bit. Also the wildlife paragraph at the very bottom could be cleaned up a bit.

The article hits the goal of addressing at least 5 topics such as, 1 Information about what species can be found in the protected area (plants, animals, other species), 2 Identification of any species at risk in the protected area, and information about their population trends, if available, 3 Information about First Nations whose traditional and ancestral territory/ies are included in the protected area, 4 Historical use of the now-protected area: what resources were harvested or extracted there (biological resources like fish, animals, plants, or timber; physical resources like rock or oil), how much, when, and by who? How did this affect the formation of the protected area?, 5 The number of visitors to the protected area, and what they do there.

I think the article had great flow, starting with a solid intro and going into detail about animals that inhabit the protected area as well as indigenous activities of the past and present and other human activities that affect the region.

The tone throughout the article is always professional and unbiased.

Throughout the article in text citations were provided and plenty of reference were listed. They are all of good quality as well.

I think in general the article was well balanced. Maybe in the paragraph about western screech owls could skim some detail but I think in general its well balanced.

Multiple viewpoints were addressed from recreation occurring in the protected area to how indigenous people used to use the land and how they will continue to use it.

Throughout the article the writing stays consistent in providing helpful information in a neutral kind type of tone.