User:Braeden Ewuk/Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area/Nataliefong00 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Braeden Ewuk, TJmukuro, Trustham02, BraedonLW


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Braeden%20Ewuk/Widgeon_Valley_National_Wildlife_Area?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead sentence gives a good summary and overview of the the marsh wetland ecosystem in Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area is. It is clear what aspects are threatening this ecosystem (invasive species, land development activities, and recreational activities). This gives good context to what can be done to protect these areas. The lead of concise and does not include any information that is not in the rest of the article. However, the lead could use a brief overview of the structure of the entire article.

The structure is a little bit confusing, as it goes from talking about fauna to human activity, then back to the ecology of the area. I think all of the ecological information should be together, either before the human activity section or after. Also, adding some subheadings under human activity may be helpful in organizing that section more. For example, maybe adding a subsection for indigenous specific human activity.

All of the content is relevant to the topic and seems to be up to date, given the references. The human activity section is well-written and contains interesting and relevant information. Especially the upcoming plans to open the Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area to the public. I think more information could be added to the wildlife section, as I found myself wanting to know more about the ecological communities and plant-life in the Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area. Maybe more information on the current ecology and plant-life of the area. The article addresses (1) what species can be found in the area, (2) species at risk, (3) the issues that led to the creation of the protected area, (4) information about First nations, (5) the general amount of visitors, and (6) first nations inclusion in the process managing the protected area. The article addresses these topics well, however, I would've liked more information on the effects of climate change on the entire area.

The overall writing of the article is easy to understand. The language is simple and direct without any run-on sentences. The overall tone is also neutral and professional and I can tell the main goal is to inform, not persuade.

The sources are reliable as most of them are coming directly from the government of Canada websites. All of the statements in the article are properly sourced. However, the government of Canada websites will not include diverse opinions and perspectives. Adding some sources from Indigenous voices/other perspectives could benefit the article and make it more well-rounded and balanced. The balance of the overall article is good, however, I think the article has a little more information on human activity than ecological communities. I think adding a little more information about the ecology (especially the current ecology) would be beneficial in balancing the article more.

In general, the article is well-written and I learned a lot about the Widgeon Valley National Wildlife Area and what risks are threatening the area. As well as what is being done for the management of the protected area. I learned the many traditions of the Katzie First Nation and the importance this area is to this indigenous community.