User:Brbs4303/Seawater/Cherrycoke5 Peer Review

General info
Brbs4303
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Brbs4303/Seawater
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Seawater
 * Seawater

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The structure of the lead section could be rephrased as it has a heading of "Mineral & Element Extractions". This does not seem to be an accurate description for the article titled "Seawater". Rather provide an article summary in the lead starting with a introductory description of Seawater.

Content

The content is well written however needs to be better organized so that it flows well into the article. It is well written, easy to follow however has a few minor grammatical errors.

Tone and Balance

The tone is neutral with User:Brbs43023 showing both positive and negative viewpoints of mineral extraction from seawater.

Sources

The content is backed up by reliable sources however the source does not have a diverse spectrum of authors as there is only one author linked to the source journals.

The list of sources has one reference written down four times please make sure you edit that part out. References numbered 3-6 are just "Levin, Lisa A. (2019). "SUSTAINABILITY IN DEEP WATER: The Challenges of Climate Change, Human Pressures, and Biodiversity Conservation". Oceanography. 32 (2): 170–180. ISSN 1042-8275."

Improvement:

User:Brbs4303/Seawater]

Remove the colons from "management of:" for better structure of the sentence.

Although desalination also comes with environmental concerns, such as costs and resources, researchers are working closely to determine more sustainable practices, such as creating more productive water plants that can deal with larger water supplies in areas where these plans weren't always available.

The above text has a grammatical error, 'weren't' is incorrect. There is redundancy in the use of "Although" at the beginning. You can improve the flow by connecting the two ideas more smoothly.

The content under 'Mineral and Extraction heading' has no footnotes/sources added in the draft while the current version of the articles does. Please make sure to edit it in your final draft.

The added sections are well written in the draft but make sure to cite properly. The same sources has been cited back to back, if this happens no need to cite every sentence if by the same author. Rather make them flow better and cite at the end of the section.

Make sure to work on the other sections too, right now it is heavily focused on mineral extraction. It would be better to include subheadings with more info on Seawater as seen in the existing article before dwelling deeper on the extraction section.