User:BreVermilion/Dora Tamana/Aliciampark Peer Review

General info
BreVermilion
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:BreVermilion/Dora Tamana
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dora Tamana
 * Dora Tamana

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I think the team did a great job at fleshing out the Wikipedia page with more connection to the feminist movement. Previously, the Wikipedia page more so focused on general work she did, but the group added two - three new paragraphs on her work in relation to the feminist movement, as well as deepening the "Early life" and "Personal life" sections to include more context and details about her. The content did improve the overall quality of the article.

Lead

The article currently does not have a substantial lead section that should include a preface of topics covered and major sections. By implementing signposts of the major sections and adding a sentence on the summary of some of the material covered, the lead could be more in line with Wikipedia's guidelines.

Content

The content that has been added is relevant, up-to-date, and addresses the feminist movement. Overall, I think this is the stronger point of the article as it allows for more contextualization on Dora Tamana's contributions to the women's movement.

Tone and Balance

The tone and balance is very neutral and reflect a more story-telling and explanatory tone that allows for readers to understand her perspective situated in the context of the socio-political atmosphere at the time. However, because this tone is biased towards her work and achievements, it might be helpful to implement what others said about her and her work instead of solely focusing on her perspective. Adding more diverse perspectives that pulls from someone other than herself will allow for a more comprehensive and balanced piece on her and her work.

Sources and References

All sources are strong secondary sources with multiple books. While sources may not be the most current or up-to-date, I think that this is just because of perhaps lack of resources of a historical figure. Perhaps looking into if there are more up-to-date sources may help bolster the article. All content reflects the material in the sources, and all the links work. Perhaps drawing from some of the sources already referenced in the old article may be helpful in helping to tie this article together.

Organization

The article does not have any grammatical or spelling mistakes that I can see. It is well organized, but may be helpful to signpost some of the major topics in the lead and topic sentences throughout the article.

Images and Media

There are no images or media to evaluate on the page. Implementation of these will help bolster the overall article.