User:Breadrhix/Miss Sophia's Diary/Kirsty Chai Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Breadrhix/ Ksomo/ SY definition)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Breadrhix/Miss_Sophia%27s_Diary/Kirsty%20Chai_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Miss Sophia's Diary

Evaluate the drafted changes
(The user wrote a clear topic sentence in each paragraph; so, it assists reader easily understand what the author is trying to say. In addition, the tone of the whole article is relatively neutral, and the user describes the background information at the beginning of the article. Moreover, the users provide proper references at the end of the page. However, users should separate the main article with a different subtitles because it would be easier for the reader to understand.  )