User:Breadrhix/Miss Sophia's Diary/Natalie061 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft article is written more specific and also provides a lot of details of the original text. In particular, it uses many excerpts such as the original understanding, but one shortcoming is that it could have been understood more deeply and could have been enjoyed by the reader as soon as they started reading it.