User:Bree624/Chicana art/AL43521 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bree624


 * Link to draft you're reviewing

User:Bree624/Chicana art


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Chicana art

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Bree. Here is my peer review for you:

Lead

 * The current lead found in the original article seems sufficient on what is discussed in the rest of the text. If you do decide to add more to your article, then please make sure that the current lead does reflect this.

Content

 * Your sentence stating, "It was brought on because of the fight to try and counter the racism that was happening," may need more explanation of what is actually going on during this time to provide more insight on its importance.
 * I do not think this portion that was added is relevant to the topic of your article, "Baca hired youth to create the mural The Great Wall of Los Angeles..."

Tone and Balance

 * The content within the original article does seem neutral. Please confirm this as you review your final draft and changes into the main article.
 * Under the sub-section "Themes," the topic of "La Virgen" seems to be relatively overrepresented compared to the topic of "Collective Memory/Correcting History."

Sources and References

 * You may want to review the current sources that are being used in the article to make sure that they reflect what is being stated. I noticed that one of the references in the article was used multiple times, but I would just double-check its relevancy.
 * The sources you used in your sandbox do not seem like they are peer-reviewed sources; therefore, they may contain biased statements within them. I would avoid blogs and try to find scholarly articles that are peer-reviewed.
 * For the text that you added in your sandbox, it would be beneficial for you to find a reliable source and include an in-text citation at the end of the sentence when you transfer this into the main article.
 * Make sure to properly place the in-text citations in your articles wherever necessary.

Organization

 * Some of the sentences like, "Murals were became largely popular...," and "Especially since La Virgen his typically clothed...," have some grammar errors that may need to fix. I would just look over your text and address other possible grammatical errors.

Overall impressions

 * I would try to look through your article a few more times to see where there could possibly be biases and where there may need to be more evidence added. Overall, the original article seems well-organized prior to your draft, but it may benefit from you providing more insight and explanation to relate it more to the topic.

-Alyssa (AL43521)