User:BreezyMac/Evaluate an Article

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Psychoanalysis and music - Wikipedia

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
This article was chosen because of the personal interest surrounding the emphasis on psychology and sourcing data in regard to anything "psychology"; it can be extensive. No one wants to research others' opinions as fact unless said opinion is based on fact or proven to be in fact-that is why legitimate sourcing matters even more so with medical articles-more specifically-psychology. This article was written and then, as a project in late 2020, was edited by a team of students as part of Wiki Project Psychology but is rated of low-importance.

Evaluate the article
LEAD- Contains figurative language; opinionated descriptors, bias-like semantics and is too short. Unwarranted language must be removed or neutralized.

CONTENT/IMAGES/MEDIA- Flow does not make sense, too fragmented without transition. The case studies need to be added to-to provide a more balanced and inclusive sample set of human experience. Contains a picture of Max Graf. The photo is not considered public domain until 70 or more years after the death of the subject. Graf died in 1958- this photo is not public domain and needs to be removed to avoid copyright infringement. There needs to be more history or information on emotions since this seems to be the connection piece between music and psychoanalysis.

TONE/BALANCE- Flow does not make sense, too fragmented without transition. Unwarranted language must be removed or neutralized

SOURCES- Some of the sources are in languages other than the language in which the article was written and published and therefore do not make a reliable source for the article's readers. There were 24 paragraphs written and 32 sources cited.

ADDITIONAL COMMENTS- Article under-developed; explore adding in more emotional psychology emphasis as the connection piece based off of bigger, more inclusive case studies. Remove opinionated filler adjectives from lead and body. Max Graf's wife was Frued's patient- might be a relationship that needs mentioning as it explains a possible intention and incentive for the diversion of Freud into using music in psychoanalysis. The only comment on the page's talk is from 2008 and it is negatively describing the page's potential. Page needs editing and determining of importance re-visit.