User:Bregresch/Dionysius of Halicarnassus/Eumulos Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Bregresch)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bregresch/Dionysius_of_Halicarnassus?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dionysius of Halicarnassus

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I like how you made the section of the lead edited more concise, You may be able to talk about how broad an influence he had amongst authors.

Romulus and Remus

Leading with the authors he is citing and having them linked is effective for giving context. You could possibly add an explanation of how these authors interpretations of the story differed if that is available. clarifying that this is a specifically roman origin story could help with readability in this section.

Tone and Balance

This section of article has an effective neutral tone. It could use more discussion of Dionysius himself and the relation to the story if available, or discussion of the other versions mentioned.

Organization

Given the subject of the article I'm also not sure if this section needs to be broken into subsections necessarily.

Overall

This edits made to this section are a good contribution to the overall article, and could benefit from some additional detail is the same balanced Tone.