User:Brendaturcios

Response to Peer Review:

Thanks for the constructive criticism! I am taking your advice and rewording the section in my description section. However, about your critique about how my sentences were choppy and did not connect, they are not suppose to be a standalone paragraph. They are intended to be added throughout the existing paragraph for clarification. However, the other two paragraphs will be added as supplemental paragraphs to their existing sections.

Thanks again!

5 Potential Wikipedia Articles

I googled Wikipedia articles that need improvement, and these three stood out.

1) Eyelash extensions I didn't even know this had a Wikipedia page but it has grammatical errors as well as lacks information.

2) Clique The editing that this article would need is grammatical, integration of sources and possibly adding to sections.

3) Brown Paper Bag Test this is one that I came across and I didn't even know that this test existed. With this article I can edit grammatical errors, as well as look at the style and toned it is written in to ensure it isn't one sided.

4) Candy bar this one stood out just because I like candy. Also I feel like it still lacks information.

5) Electronic dance music this page talks about a specific type of music. It needs work, a lot of the citations are either missing or unclear, there are a lot of grammatical errors, and also in some instances it seems one sided.

I think option 3 or 5 are your best options. Either one is OK. You are welcome to move forward drafting the article. Erickaakcire (talk) 18:04, 26 September 2016 (UTC)