User:BrennonBarney/Giuseppe Bertani/CSMicro4054 Peer Review

General info
Brennon Barney
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:BrennonBarney/Giuseppe Bertani
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):does not exists

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has not been updated; the text is above the article draft. It would be helpful to move it down into the sections. The opening sentence is to the point and links to other pages that would be helpful to someone who has no knowledge of microbiology. It hasn’t yet been organized into sections, but that’s okay. I would recommend looking at other Wikipedia articles like Salvador Edward Luria to see how other microbiologists pages have been organized and some things you can add if you want and/or can find the info.

The content is relevant to Giuseppe’s contributions to microbiology and his accomplishments. To my knowledge it is up to date. Content fits and flows nicely. I am not sure if it deals with any equity gap. The content is presented in a neutral tone with no obvious biases or over/underrepresented viewpoints. It seems to be balanced and neutral.

Sources 2 and 3 are the same source. You may want to consolidate them to fix some of the code errors. To fix the access date you may have do some digging in the code or ask Dr. Crook for help. The content reflects the sources and is summarized in a good way. The sources are reasonably current, and the links work.

The information is clear, concise, and easy to read. I think you can use less parentheses in the first sentence. The article does have two good secondary sources, but it only has them listed so far. It does not quite match Wikipedia’s other microbiologists’ style yet. It does link to other articles.

Overall, I think it is a good article that needs just a little more organizational work to be ready to go. It is concise and clearly written in a respectful way.