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'''Group 6: please be sure to sign your work. You must be logged into Wikipedia to do this. The only person I can identify below is Brett. J.R. Council (talk) 14:52, 28 September 2016 (UTC)

'1). The one problem with the chosen Article (Feminist Therapy for Asian American Women?''' The article that i chose is titled Feminist Therapy for Asian American Women?, which talks about general background of Asian American women and the history of it from the view of mental health therapy. It mentions that lot of Asian American women had to go over difficult times and its consequences on emotion as well as emotional health. In addition, the article talks about cultural history of Asian American women on the states, cultural context, and experience in growing up the in the states as being Asian American women. The article did a great job giving the audience background about cultural and background information about Asian American women also did a good job addressing the expectations that they had to go through which resulted mental trauma because of domestic violence and even discrimination. However, the article was short and did not elaborate on such topic as much as I wanted to read or i expected. Also, i wanted to know the actual definition of Asian American women which specifically defining what they meant by saying Asian American women, including the specific geographical areas. The article mostly focused on Korean, and Japanese American women's background and history in the states, but the concept of Asian American women is much more than that. The article could have also gave more information on specific mental health issues that Asian American women go through or seek help here in the states.

2). Two References that is related to the chosen article: 1. Neesha R. Patel PhD (2007) The Construction of South-Asian-AmericanWomanhood, Women & Therapy, 30:3-4, 51-61, DOI: 10.1300/J015v30n03_05

2. Neesha R. Patel PhD (2007) The Construction of South-Asian-AmericanWomanhood, Women & Therapy, 30:3-4, 51-61, DOI: 10.1300/J015v30n03_05

These two articles both contain relevant information regarding to the chosen article, also supports more general and wide topic that could help build more information on the topic by Reiko True.

3).Comment/question - Is there any requirement that we have to find about the chosen article/person that we have to find her recent work or current status in the field? Would that be necessary? You should provide complete information, so yes. See the 'Editing Wikipedia articles on psychologists' for instructions about writing on a person. J.R. Council (talk) 14:52, 28 September 2016 (UTC)

-Also, Can we use articles or book that our chosen person Reiko True contributed or the article that cited some of her work but not fully depend on her work? Such as an article about mental health counseling for Asian American Women and cited True's studies? Brett Turbeville
 * Yes, of course. J.R. Council (talk) 14:52, 28 September 2016 (UTC)

1) There is no wikipedia article about Rieko True. This in itself is a problem.

2) I found 2 refrences to be used to gain a better understanding of our topic: Various authors. (2016) Featured Psychologist: Reiko True, PhD. Retrieved from http://www.apa.org/pi/oema/resources/ethnicity-health/psychologists/true.asp

Various authors. (February 2006) Reiko Homma True: PhD Clinical Psychologist. Retrieved from http://www.apa.org/monitor/feb06/true.aspx

3) I wonder, since our topic is a person, how heavily do I focus on her personal history and achievements vs. her work and findings?
 * Try to give equal coverage to both. J.R. Council (talk) 14:52, 28 September 2016 (UTC)

What challenges do you anticipate our group will face as a result of our person not being well known? ~ Brett.turbo (talk) 19:06, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
 * That should not be a challenge as long as you can find information on her and her work. J.R. Council (talk) 14:52, 28 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Please note: Don't use the nowiki code! It prevents your signature from showing up. Just sign with the four tildes. When you sign properly, ~ will not display, just your name and time/date. If it's not clear what I'm talking about,go into 'Edit source' mode and view this text.J.R. Council (talk) 14:52, 28 September 2016 (UTC)

To Do List

1.) Contribute to the groups to do list on the sandbox. **All group members

2.) Contribute to article outline in amy's sandbox. **All group members

3.) Create the lead section. **Tyra

4.) Review lead section proof-read for grammatical errors as well as content quality. **Amy, Brett

5.) References. **Brett Brett.turbo (talk) 13:51, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

Brett.turbo (talk) 13:29, 11 October 2016 (UTC)

Outline

1) Lead Section

2) Early Life

3) Notable Contributions

4) Career

5) Conclusion

Brett.turbo (talk) 13:55, 11 October 2016 (UTC)

To - Do List.

To Do List

1.) Contribute to the groups to do list on the sandbox. **All group members

2.) Contribute to article outline in amy's sandbox. **All group members

3.) Create the lead section. **Tyra

4.) Review lead section proof-read for grammatical errors as well as content quality. **Amy, Brett

Outline

1) Lead Section (will be completed by Tyra - including what the article will be about and, give general information about what is going to talk about, why we are writing about it

2) Early Life - Research on her early life, childhood, home country, hometown, early studies

3) Notable Contributions - earlier studies that were contributed to her work, studies on Asian women and their mental health

4) Career

5) Conclusion

References[edit source] References Everstine, L., Everstine, D. S., Heymann, G. M., True, R. H., Frey, D. H., Johnson, H. G., & Seiden, R. H. (1980). Privacy and confidentiality in psychotherapy. American Psychologist, 35(9), 828-840. doi:10.1037/0003-066X.35.9.828

This article has a contribution True, and addresses personal confidentiality and its relation to psychotherapy.14:58, 14 October 2016 (UTC)14:58, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

(All members contributed to this assignment: outline, to do list and reference)'

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 5
You've done a good job on this, except the outline is very general. Putting more detail in your outline will make writing the rest of the article much easier. Also, it will help if you dig deeper and find more references. J.R. Council (talk) 20:43, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead Section Brett Turbeville

Reiko True is an internationally known Japanese American Psychologist recognized for her efforts to advance mental health services for Asian Americans and other minorities. Throughout her career she has worked to provide mental health services to disaster victims, directed psychological associations, and practiced clinical psychology internationally.
 * This is a very nice first sentence for the lead. J.R. Council (talk) 21:09, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

True was born in Japan to a large family. Her mother died as a result of domestic violence. The death of her mother motivated True to eventually study human behavior. In Japan she received a degree in International relations and business. She went on to studied psychology in California leading to her dedication to the advancement of minorities.
 * This part should go in the main text, not the lead. J.R. Council (talk) 21:09, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Throughout her career True has made many contributions to Psychology. She was the first female director of the Mental Health, Substance Abuse and Forensic Service program. She served on the Committee on Women in 2012, Headed the Clinical Psychology Masters program in Tokyo, Served as president of the Asian American Psychologist Association, and now runs her own private practice which caters to Asian Americans and other minorities in San Francisco. Brett.turbo (talk) 16:42, 26 October 2016 (UTC)

The above is also good material for the lead. J.R. Council (talk) 21:09, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Comment on Brett's lead section about the topic: I think the start of the lead section is well rounded and has a legit description of True Reiko and her background. However, I would like to addd some of her examples of her work that has done, I think that would be nice. ArigunAmy (talk) 02:16, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
 * It's okay to add some general comments about her work to the lead, but specific examples are most appropriate afterward in the main text. J.R. Council (talk) 21:09, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead Section Arigun Ganbat 01:52, 27 October 2016 (UTC)01:52, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

Women of color in Psychology True Reiko was one of the psychologists who contributed highly important improvement and innovation to several areas such as Asian American Association along with pointing out mental health issues through color of women in America. Reiko did her majority of research and analysis in terms of psychotherapy on common mental issues and possible mental therapies for Asian American women in the states. She herself was a Japanese – American woman who lived in California State mostly in her time in America. Although her work was heavily fell on women and gender issues towards color of women and it has also been focused on communities for Asian Americans. Among her work, she was highly recognized as a woman of color whose work essentially influenced to specific community that has never been really studied in the 1960’s. Highlight of her work was done on few races within Asian continents, which were China, Korea, Japan, Indonesia and Malaysia etc. True’s engagement in the Asian American community showed through many of her research and studies, which one of the importantly recognizable study was done in 1989 in Journal of Community Psychology titled A Bitter Bean: Mental Status and Attitudes in Chinatown. Most of her major research that specifies community of Asian American people has accomplished with peers and colleagues who themselves were Asian American as well. California was and still is a major area for many races to come together and it is the spot for first comers. True’s work stated many unwritten rules, expectation, dilemmas that immigrants go through. True’s work that studied emotional outcome from disaster was done after the Kobe’s earthquake in Japan in 1995. She not only focused on emotional distress on Asian American women, her work expanded to research on wide emotional ranges that caused by distinguishing events that happened in her home country as well.ArigunAmy (talk) 01:53, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

'See talk page for my comments'. Brett.turbo (talk) 15:30, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I also put my comments to Amy on the talk page. J.R. Council (talk) 21:09, 31 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I don't see anything from Tyra. She needs to contribute to get credit. J.R. Council (talk) 21:10, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Final Lead

Reiko True is an internationally known Japanese American Psychologist recognized for her efforts to advance mental health services for Asian Americans and other minorities. Throughout her career she has worked to provide mental health services to disaster victims, directed psychological associations, and practiced clinical psychology internationally. Throughout her career True has made many contributions to Psychology. She was the first female director of the Mental Health, Substance Abuse and Forensic Service program. She served on the Committee on Women in 2012, headed the Clinical Psychology Masters program in Tokyo, she served as president of the Asian American Psychologist Association, and now runs her own private practice which caters to Asian Americans and other minorities in San Francisco. True strives to contribute to the scientific community as well. She conducts research studying mental attitudes and status among minorities in the community, and publishes her research in order to benefit the Asian American community.

Brett.turbo (talk) 17:13, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on combined lead:
This looks good. Just a couple of minor edits needed. Go ahead and start developing your main article.
 * 1) You need to include reference citations for the information in your lead.
 * 2) Include her year of birth in parentheses right after her name. J.R. Council (talk) 22:52, 10 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Also, only Brett has signed this, so I need to know that the rest of this group contributed to give them credit. J.R. Council (talk) 22:54, 10 November 2016 (UTC)

Final Article
Brett.turbo (talk) 19:33, 23 November 2016 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on article
This is one of the few articles from the class that is almost ready to publish. Nice work! My comments follow. I am sending the link to Ian, and he will probably have more suggestions.
 * 1) Need to add her birth date in parentheses after her name in first sentence.
 * 2) This is well written. However, you should still proofread and edit for conciseness and readability.
 * 3) The main thing you need to change is the lead. It is too long. The information on specific contributions can be moved to appropriate sections below. I would move all the information from "Throughout..." to "...San Francisco", and leave the beginning and end of the lead in place.
 * 4) You've got the reference list generated by Wikipedia under "Notes" and then your own reference list. If you have references that still need to be added as citations in the text, do this, then delete the rest of the material. J.R. Council (talk) 02:25, 2 December 2016 (UTC)

Brett's response to Dr. Council's comments

 * 1) I added her birth year. Her birth date has proven difficult to find. I made a call and sent an email but i have not heard back. For now I put her birth year in parenthesis.


 * 1) I proofread the entire document and made small changes to each section. I made the most revisions in her research contributions


 * 1) I made the changes to the lead. I deleted the section on her notable contributions so it is now a more general introduction


 * 1) I deleted the extra reference list after ensuring all my references were in the notes section.