User:Brettellier/Environmental impacts of lithium-ion batteries/ToedToad Peer Review

General info
Brettellier
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://w.wiki/9MgT
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://w.wiki/9MgU:

Lead
There have been no changes made to the lead section. I think that there needs to be, since the lead section in pretty weak. The lead section includes information that is not present in the article like information about the history of lithium ion batteries. This information is only present in the wiki article about lithium ion batteries. Within this, there is not information that is actually relevant to the topic of the environmental impacts of lithium batteries. This lead section is not detailed enough, or relevant enough to the article. This lead section is more so like a lead section that would be used for the article on lithium ion batteries. This lends to my suggestion (see overall impressions) that this article should be added to the article on lithium batteries and that it does not need to be separate.

Content
All of the content added is relevant and appear to be up to date. With all of the sources published within the last 4 years, this is a good sign that all of the information is up to date. Unfortunately it appears that about only 6 sentences were actually added to the article. Of this one section was added about hard rock deposits. In this section it would be nice to see more information about the environmental impacts of lithium mining in Australia. I also found this interesting report about lithium battery recycling in Australia. Consider talking more about what is going on in countries to mitigate impacts of these supposed "green energy" batteries. Also, please consider adding more information to this article in general, because what has been added so far is very strong.

Tone and Balance
The content is presented in a neutral way, considering that the topic presented could be considered an inherently biased. There are no claims made that are heavily biased towards a particular position and this content does not attempt to convince the reader of any position. I would like to see more information about how the environmental impacts of lithium ion mining effects marginalized people and countries with lower GDP, especially in the pyrometallurgical recovery section.

Sources and References
All of the new information is cited, except for the sentence "Afterwards, the concentrated brine is moved to a nearby production facility to produce Li2CO3 and LiOH•H2O". Except for that, all the content accurately reflects what the cited sources are saying. The majority of the sources cited are review articles, from recent years. This is a good way to understand the current information in the field. Though there could be more primary articles used, that talk specifically about certain advancements in the field. A Forbes article is cited when talking about hard rock deposits in Australia, and mentioning that Australia is the worlds largest producer of lithium. A better source for that would be this peer reviewed report from 2019 published in resource policies. The links to the added sources all work.

Organization
There is not much content that was actually added, but of the stuff that was, it is all well written. I look forward to seeing the final product. The content that was added is all well organized, as is the article in general.

Images and Media
The article does not have any images added. This would definitely benefit the article. I would suggest a schematic of some kind illustrating the process of extracting lithium, to making the batteries, to then their possible disposal/recycling.

Overall impressions
The content added has made the article more complete, however I feel as though much more needs to be added. The article thus far does touch on the environmental impacts, however more case studies should be added, as well as talks of government policies, and advocate movements. Honestly, overall I think this article should be merged with either the lithium or lithium batteries Wikipedia page.