User:Brian S Liu/Education in India/Honeybee15 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
I believe that from your outline the content you want to provide is relevant and will greatly improve the article by adding more information from modern hxstory as will as adding more content in the subsection for teachers and adding the subsection on Public Private Partnerships (PPP).

I like how you're also fixing up spellings. You may be able to write more in the "History of education in the Indian subcontinent" section.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
Be careful in your wording for your additions. In your proposed edit for PPP, you wrote a statement with "The most effective solutions involve ...]". The word "most" can seem to be biased as it makes one thing seem "better" than another.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
I didn't see many sources included in your editions.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
I can see why you want to edit the "Extracurricular activities" subsection. It seems a bit out of place in the article right now. I think maybe changing it to "Student Experience" may be more beneficial as this section can then go one to discuss how these extracurriculars affected students. This would be the focus on students--if this is what you're going for. If you would rather just speak about the extracurriculars as the activities they are, then maybe you might want to keep this as the "Extracurricular activities" subsection and place it under the "Quality" section instead.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
Overall I think you're on a good track to adding some great improvements to the page. Your contributions sounds well thought out and well researched. Would just like to see more sources!