User:BrianaMazzocchi/David Shenton/Roygbiv99 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (BrianaMazzocchi)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:BrianaMazzocchi/David Shenton

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? No

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? The tone could be more neutral with the adjustment of only a few words. For example, "David Shenton (May 20, 1949) is a British cartoonist that has contributed a lifelong career to the queer comic industry." The word "contributed" could be eliminated. Also, in the sentence: "has tackled many heated issues from same-sex marriage to the aids crisis" the word "heated" could be eliminated. The word "from" suggests a spectrum, instead you could just say "including same-sex marriage and the AIDS crisis."
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? No
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? Yes
 * Are images well-captioned? Yes but maybe make it a full sentence: "David Shenton with a puppet"
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? Not sure
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? Yes, great photo too

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? Not yet but I trust sources will be added as the project moves along
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? Could use more
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? Yes
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? Yes

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? The article is not yet complete but the lead is great and should provide a good basis for the rest of the article to emerge
 * What are the strengths of the content added? Unbiased
 * How can the content added be improved? Just a few comments at the top about language

Overall evaluation
Good job! You have a ways to go but this is a great start. Your organization and structure look like they will serve you well.