User:BriannaJohnston/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?

 * 1) 1  acupuncture


 * 1) 2 mental inequality

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.)


 * 1) 1 I chose this article because it focuses on my sector for my PE experience. This article is important because it discusses the use of acupuncture through different pain conditions along with giving some information about needle insertion and the needles used. I found this article to be descriptive and give the relative information needed to know about acupuncture. It gave some sentences about the history of acupuncture n the lead and rest of the lead explained the market of acupuncture. The lead focused more on the economic part of acupuncture than the use of acupuncture as an alternative medicine. My impression was that I did not see that it was very important to explain the market of acupuncture, but it maybe important to know for some other people.


 * 1) 2 I chose this article because it focuses on the area of my sector. Thus, this article explain all the social determinants regarding mental health inequality and it I found all the topics they introduced to be comprehensive. Therefore, it discussed the topics I assumed I would see before opening up the article such racial, education, and socio-economic disparities. With that, I found the article to be informative and clear when learning about mental health inequalities, I would say that this is a good article. Some things that could be more in depth is the institutional racism in healthcare. Thus, the article did go over the racism that many marginalized communities experienced, but I think to define the term and explain how healthcare workers can have implicit bias or the invisibility of racism can be explained more.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)


 * 1) 1 The acupuncture article comes off as very neutral. The clinical practice sections provides informations cited from Mayo Clinic hospital and or American Society of Anesthesiologists. Other parts of the article included data from systematic reviews regarding the effectiveness of acupuncture and the data regarding acupuncture when treating certain pain conditions. Some of the content did not feel relevant such the as the market of acupuncture; however, the instance there can maybe be to show how much people spend on acupuncture in the world and in the U.S. Moreover, the pain conditions discussed in the article mainly discussed pain conditions that insurance covers for acupuncture treatment. Therefore, lower-back pain and chronic pain conditions were discussed; however, conditions such as substance abuse were talked about in the article. Nonetheless, I do not believe the article is trying to sway the reader for one view of the article because it gives the information on the format of data found and the article is sharing that data without bias.  Even so, the sources shown are reliable and thorough as many are scholarly articles that includes scientific evidenced from research trials that were conducted regrading acupuncture. More so, the cost-effectiveness of acupuncture was also highlighted; however, it was not extensive as it only stated that research could conclude anything. Therefore, that is something I would want to change as I found research explaining about effectiveness and how it more beneficial for low-income communities to community acupuncture as it is cheaper or free. Additionally, there are some images showing the different acupuncture points and the images shown are Chinese images of acupuncture. Moreover, the organization of acupuncture seemed different. Thus, the article started with a lead discussing the economic market about acupuncture and then does not state acupuncture's market anywhere else. Then the article discusses acupuncture in clinical practice and states history towards the end of the article; however, I believe the history should have been addressed in the beginning of the article to explain the origins of acupuncture before discussing the use of acupuncture in the U.S. Further, the talk page seems very controversial as a lot of people are very on each other with the information they post regarding acupuncture. Overall, I think the article could bring in more point of views such as the other reasons as to why acupuncture is used in the U.S. and more specifically the integration of acupuncture as an alternative medicine in conjunction with a conventional practices.


 * 1) 2 The mental health inequality article is very structured. It provides the different parts that affects mental health inequalities. The lead is very straightforward by stating all the sections they will be discussing in the rest of the article. In fact, I found may wikipedia articles do not state all the main ideas in the lead, but this article does and goes more in detail in the body. I do not believe this article is trying to sway the reader. The information provided in this article is comprehensive and neutral. I do not see any grammatical errors and the writing is clear. I found that some things presented in the article could be more detailed such as explaining the invisibility of racism in healthcare and institutional racism. Thus, the article does present a racial disparity section, but I think there some parts in that section that can be more detailed/defined. The talk page seems long and people seem to collaborate well; therefore, I do not see them going into war with one another. Some of their conversations are them saying thank you for the constructive feedback someone has given them and includes them proposing new ideas. Further, the sources are scholarly sources and some of them are newer sources from 2020. Some sources are older dating back to 2002 or 2004. Even so, the article highlights other wikipedia articles such as educational disparities to let the reader go to another article on that topic more in depth. Nonetheless, it does not cite wikipedia as a source. The article also does not include any images, which makes sense as I don't see any images that would be needed for the article. Additionally, the organization is very well structured because everything mentioned in the lead is addressed more thoroughly in the body of the article. Therefore, everything the reader saw in the lead knew what else to expect in the rest of the article. Overall, the article is precise and informative, but I do believe it could include terms such as institutional racism. These terms can bring more information and ways for people to identify the racism in the healthcare system, which is a direct result of mental health inequalities.