User:Briannastjean/Theory of Hyper(in)visibility/Kenthecreator Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Briannastjean, MeaganLukavec, Martiniaudrey, Gabspedraza, Lizzo2210, RamirezAlejandro305


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Briannastjean/Theory_of_Hyper%28in%29visibility?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Briannastjean/Theory_of_Hyper%28in%29visibility?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like how you started with the body of your article with examples of the theory in different cultural lenses. My group began with the Lead section but we cant finish it until we have the body so I will be starting on the body in the same way thanks to your groups method. The way your worded the body is easy to understand and read as well. The amount of sources you have are good because you are not pulling from one source for all of your information. Make sure to remember when you do your lead section to properly explain your theory as a whole because the phrase invisibility vs visibility is a bit confusing to me now without that context.